Last Week we were doing a animation on our Paint a picture story . I think i done a awesome job and next time I should be more imaginative.
Monday, June 23, 2014
The Mystery of the Wharepaku
This Week Room 17 have been painting a picture for writing. I like mine because i was making it up. I think I should put more detail into my writing.
add detail to our creative writing to make it interesting to our reader
- use of descriptive words to build a picture
- use different sentence beginnings and types
- use expressive vocabulary
- describe the event so the reader feels as though they are there
- be creative and imaginative
As I walked past the laundry door I saw another door on the door “How strange is that, in fact that is not strange because I’ve seen a flying sausage before” I thought to myself . Without a doubt I walked to the door , I was such a fatty I couldn’t fit through. For a moment I thought I was seeing things but actually down by the door there was a little bottle of pink liquid and just by luck it said “ Drink me if you dare but beware”. So if you really know me i drank it. Then in a couple of seconds i could feel myself shrinking, it felt weird but then guess what i turned into “ a kind of maori minion” and with that i marched on in. Ding ding went the bell in my brain how are you going to open the door i thought “easy” i laughed, and with precaution trying not to be too loud, just in case my dog notices me i tiptoed to the kitchen. For once there was no one in the kitchen which i found weird. I climbed up the handles on the spoons,knives, and forks cupboard , and on the bench there were some scissors that mum was obviously using to get silver beet off the garden. I grabbed them and then ventured back to the edge of the bench and jumped off. Then i ran back to that unusual door then held the scissors and then started hacking at the keyhole then finally it opened just enough for me to go in. As i entered i seen nothing but pitch black, i started sulking and i came to my sense which was carry on. I spotted a dim light by the door i grabbed it and shut the white door behind me. I saw some wisps so i followed them and the wisps led me to another door. I heard the flush of a toilet i whispered to myself “ no of course that wasn’t the flush of a toilet i thought” i curiously opened the door to find a toilet talking to another one. I ran out and screamed “ ahh mum talking toilets”. I raced out the way i came in slammed the door . Oh no i can’t go big again. Then i seen a the bottle that said “ drink me” and then quick as a lightning bolt i drank it and the a last i was back my normal size. “Oh what a extraordinary adventure that was” i muttered.
Friday, June 20, 2014
WALT use all our senses to create a mental picture from the text.
This Week we were doing a presentation about this book we read.
Here is a picture of a ship landing on the island , I used Sumo paint to design it. I think my pictures a cool. Next time I should have more information
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Friday, June 6, 2014
This Week Room 17 were doing a story describing a time we were successful. I think my story was alright. next time i should be more ecstatic about writing.
You are going to write a descriptive recount, telling our audience about a time you were successful.
Describe a time we were successful
Have you remembered…
- start with something that was said or thought
- Use punctuation (capital letters to start sentences and names and fullstops to end)
- to put everything in the right order
- use describing words and lots of detail.
- Re-read it to check it makes sense
Omg I was so impatient when we were doing the drum roll because I wanted to know who the new captains were but I really wanted to know who was house captain for tuatara . Haha mouthed Waiwai as Miss Wihongi announced me the other captain of the best house Tuatara.
I was so proud of myself for achieving this because these were always one of my goals and it came true. I reckon I will be a good house captain.
Meanwhile all I could hear was the sound of House names but it sounded like Turatara. All that screaming gave me a ear ache but I still think that Tuatara is the best even though everybody cheers for Tuna Weta and Koura.
I reckon people thought I was a right choice because they had the courage to come and say Well done. I was really happy that they thought that way .
“Oh Wowza” I thought to myself you are the new house captain and i said “Yeah Oh” aloud.
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